Friday, September 28, 2012
In which I copyedit Tim Cook's open letter on Maps, without actually addressing any of its content (since the rest of the Internet is probably already doing that right now)
We launched Maps initially with the first version of iOS. As time progressed, we wanted to provide our customers with even better Maps including features such as …
Awkward phrasing. Suggested change:
iOS customers have been enjoying a great Maps app since the very first iPhone. But we never stand stand still with any of our products, and we wanted to keep making it even better, by including features such as …
The more our customers use our Maps the better it will get and we greatly appreciate all of the feedback we have received from you.
Need to insert commas after ‘Maps’ and ‘get’.